Once upon a time in an enchanted forest resided a colony of strange and mystical creatures that one may only be able to conjure in ones imagination. This community functioned very much like our own; however, it was all under the the ruling of the Queen Fairy and her two fairy daughter, Fawna and Nala.
Although Fawna and Nala were twins, the two could not differ more. Fawna developed into a fairy who radiated such natural beauty. In the warm sunshine, her long, elegant wings would shimmer as she flew over her colony, beaming that charming smile that caused anyone to immediately fall in love. Fawna could have anything she wanted just because of her beauty, and she knew it. She constantly had suitors lined up at her door offering her anything her heart desired as desperate attempts to gain her affection. School work was never a priority. She truly believed that she could have great success merely by batting her eyelashes.
Nala, her twin sister, was the complete antithesis of her. Where Fawna had outer beauty, Nala embodied inner beauty, but no one seemed to care about that. Although Nala was a fairy, she was born with dull, gray, fractured wings; therefore, she was never blessed with the same outer beauty or flying ability as her sister. Nala was almost painful to look at and had a face that "only a mother could love." Nala would hide within the dark, cold shadows of her castle as she enviously watched her sister be given anything she desired.
The one thing that Nala had over Fawna was her strict dedication to her studies. Since Nala was very unwanted, she spent the majority of her time intensely working on her school work or even examining every detail of the beautiful environment that surrounded her. Nala infinitely grew intellectually, but it never seemed to match up to anything Fawna did. However, Nala remained persistent and continued to endeavor to reach her own version of perfection.
Suddenly, tragedy struck upon the once peaceful village. The evil spirits conjured violent gusts of wind and lightning. The small, feeble creatures of the forest feared for their lives and desperately clung onto various flowers and vines for their lives; however, nothing seemed to be saving them. All of the citizens flew to their beautiful, popular leader, Fawna, for instructions on how to survive. Unfortunately, Fawna was not intellectually prepared to handle such a crisis. She merely did what she know how to do best, smile and attempt to comfort her citizens with her beauty. This time, her efforts failed. The winds had developed into a tornado and one by one, creatures were being sucked into the death trap. The citizens were finally seeing Fawna for what she truly was, an imbecile.
Luckily, Nala stepped up and instructed her citizens to safety. Because of Nala and her impeccable knowledge, she was able to keep everyone far away from danger in underground caves where the wind could not touch anyone. The citizens realized who deserved the real leadership role this entire time, and finally recognized Nala's beauty. Nala's knowledge finally shone brighter than the sparkles on Fawna's wings or the shine in her smile and she was finally made an equal.
1. Molly did an excellent job critiquing society's infatuation with beauty and ignorance of truly desireable character triats.
ReplyDelete2. Molly used very strong diction within her short story which gave the work a lot of extra flavor as displayed in the following quote. " Fawna developed into a fairy who radiated such natural beauty. In the warm sunshine, her long, elegant wings would shimmer as she flew over her colony, beaming that charming smile that caused anyone to immediately fall in love." This quote in particular uses delicate words like elegant, shimmering, and charming, and gives of a euphenous tone. Contrast between Fawna and Nala is also displayed through more strong diction. Nala's "dull, grey, fractured" wings are physically ugly, but are the antithesis of her inner pureness.
3. I really enjoyed the moral of Molly's fable and content wise, I think all the neccessary bases were covered; however, I think more details about Nala's coming to power could've helped the reader develope a stronger visual image as well as make the story a little longer. But great job Molly, I love this:)
1. Molly described how soceity tends to focus on outer aspects of a person, rather than the more important inner characteristics.
ReplyDelete2. Molly clearly entailed the irony of how Fawna's beauty could not always pass her along in life, in her short story. "Unfortunately, Fawna was not intellectually prepared to handle such a crisis. She merely did what she know how to do best, smile and attempt to comfort her citizens with her beauty. This time, her efforts failed." Many people in soceity fail to recognize that their is more to life than physical appearance. However, Nala, the studious yet ugly fairy, comes out stronger in the end by saving the day. Molly writes about how one should never judge a book by its cover, because cover's can often be a very misleading mask.
3. I think Molly's story really plays true to todays world. Many people unfortuneatley forget the importance of innner beauty compared to outer beauty. Just like Melissa said, i think Molly could have possibly wrote a little bit more on Nala's rise to being the hero, and even described Nala's life after her saving the day.
Overalll, very good, and fun to ready. Awesome story Mollyy!(: <3
I wrote a comment, but it failed to post. I will try again. I liked this story though I did feel the end was rushed. I wanted to enjoy seeing the hardworking fairy take over in popularity and etc. after suffering for all those years. I really did like it though when the one fairy tries to entertain everyone with her beauty when the world is falling apart around them. That is a great and telling moment. Nice work.
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